You're right this poem couldn't be considered anywhere near good because that would be an understatement: This piece is simply amazing There really isn't anything to point out that needs improvement so I'll just get to the rating:
Vision - 5 stars because you stuck with the theme and the character's thoughts are shown very aesthetically where it is almost as if I am the one experiencing it all.
Originality - 5 starts because I have never seen any other piece nearly like this one; it really stands out as well as originality can.
Technique - 5 stars because you made it to be abstract and, although I may have an assumption of what the piece is about, I'm not really sure what the concrete idea behind this is and so it was executed very well.
Impact - 5 stars because everyone seems to think about it a good bit, myself included, and that is a very effective way to impact the reader; if we never thought about it it wouldn't stay with us after we clicked off of this page.
Perfect score all around and I hope to see more of this style from you soon ^^
Sta.sh
Vision - 5 stars because you stuck with the theme and the character's thoughts are shown very aesthetically where it is almost as if I am the one experiencing it all.
Originality - 5 starts because I have never seen any other piece nearly like this one; it really stands out as well as originality can.
Technique - 5 stars because you made it to be abstract and, although I may have an assumption of what the piece is about, I'm not really sure what the concrete idea behind this is and so it was executed very well.
Impact - 5 stars because everyone seems to think about it a good bit, myself included, and that is a very effective way to impact the reader; if we never thought about it it wouldn't stay with us after we clicked off of this page.
Perfect score all around and I hope to see more of this style from you soon ^^